Savor the Story | CWBC

Christian Writers Blog ChainThis month the Christian Writers Blog Chain have been writing on the word ‘savor’, not to be confused with ‘savIor’. :) That would be a different month altogether…. As before, this month I will be posting an appropriate excerpt from one of my novels. This month my possible choices were all romantic in vein, but the following seemed the most appropriate for not only the word in its most literal sense, but the spiritual and philosophical senses as well.

From ‘The Story: a tale of redemption & romance’, my romantic fantasy available through Smashwords for $0.99 cents.

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‘It is the name of your future we seek, my lord knight. As King Reese sought and found his new future, battling the darkness of his past self.’

Zain turned away, but he could not venture farther down the mountain path. He fisted his hands.

‘It is the future all desire for you. One of happiness and wholeness. A future filled with peace. One of love and family. It is the future name the God of this mountain desires to guide you toward, my lord. But I have the freedom to do so only should you allow me beyond the silence to the voices. When you face them, that is when they cease to have power over your waiting future.’

“And what future should I seek?” he asked, his voice a low rumble as he desperately held back the tide of hope. “You have seen my past. What future do I deserve but the life of constantly seeking a peace I do not?”

Zain noticed, again, the bright glow of the gem on the apex of her staff– He heard children’s laughter and the melody of a woman’s greeting… He paled and turned, his eyes focusing on the images of family within the white circle.

A slightly older version of himself walked toward a simple home outside of LaDoon castle. He wore the armor of Crusader Captain, the elite guard of the LaDoon Kingdom. An insignia of the highest honor emblazoned his breastplate.

Two boys ceased their sword play to charge toward him in welcome. A young girl of five years ventured after them, a doll dragging behind her as she reached for his hand, her pale hair aglow in the late afternoon sun.

‘This is a future waiting for you,’ the Oracle intoned with gentle passion. ‘Not enough? What of this?’

The oak staff shifted, and with it the images. Another collection of years. He stood, distinguished and content as he trained an older pair of sons in the techniques of battle. A beautiful daughter cheered from the sidelines performing needlework beside her mother, a woman of ethereal beauty and bright eyes. She looked upon her family with adoration, love caressing her lips with such intensity his heart ached for the reality.

‘Or this? Would this future be enough, my lord?’

The images blurred and shifted, focusing on the cathedral within LaDoon Kingdom and rows of soldiers and civilians as he led his daughter to the young man waiting at the alter beyond.

The King’s son.

A royal marriage. A future of prosperity, happiness, and honor for his daughter… and his sons standing near the king in the armor of the knights with honors decorating their tunics and hanging from their necks. Futures of honor. Lives of protection and duty– Zain turned away, tearing his helmet from his head. “Stop.” It clashed to the ground. “Stop, I say!”

The laughter and the images faded as her oak staff lowered. She rested a hand upon his shoulder. ‘My lord, this is a waiting future. One you deserve. A future your friends wish for you.’ Her hold tightened as she turned him to face her; her features yet hidden in the shadows of her cowl. ‘Will you truly turn your back on these? Will you not fight also for the protection of these souls? Will you not give them their lives?’

“How…?” Zain shook his head. “How can this be possible? I know no such woman as would have me.”

‘This destiny awaits your forward step, my lord knight. You must quest through the horrors of your past and realize their importance.’

He clenched his jaw. “Importance, my lady Oracle? My past caused pain and death, nearly collapsing the kingdom I had sworn to protect. How do I find importance within treachery?”

‘You seek it. You compare who you were to who you now are and seek the beauty within the change. You admit the strengths caused by the overcoming of the weakness.’

The need for this future rose within Zain like a torrential wave. He fisted his hands, driving them into his eyes as if to rub the vision from his mind. But the desire already burned his soul. He ached to hear the laughter of family and feel the pride of fatherhood. He lowered himself to one knee, head lowered. “Guide the quest, my lady Oracle, for this future I will have.”


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25 Comments

  1. Nona,

    The scene made me think of Matthew 4:9 where Satan tells Jesus “All this I will give you,” he said, “if you will bow down and worship me.”

    The allure of the future is a powerful motivator. The issue is whether we chase after a future contained in this life or in eternity.

    • =O
      Well, the oracle isn’t evil, she’s a priest of the One God, but I can definitely see how it would seem that she is the voice of the alluring side of evil….

  2. I’m enjoying your excerpts. Best of luck with your stories.

  3. I love your excerpt Nona- It is a sweet example of what we dream our future would be- full of honor and praise. The unforeseeable part from here to there is all the little adventures, the courage and the daily choices to achieve the dream. Great post- keep up the good work!

  4. I like the part where Zain is bemoaning the pain and failures of his past. The oracle tells him to “compare who you were to who you are now and seek the beauty within the change. You admit the strengths caused by the overcoming of the weakness.”

    I believe that your story is saying we need to move out of the pain and remorse of our past experiences and actions. God forgives and cleanses. We need to step away from those failures and walk in the new path that Jesus gives to us. However, we remember the lessons we learned, and savor the grace God gave and the changes He made.

    Well-written and interesting. Makes me want to read the entire book. :grin:

    • Wow, Sandi. :) Thanks for putting your interpretation here. You’re spot on. Also, I’m glad that it left you wanting more. :) This one, if on time, will be released in August.

  5. Interesting excerpt. Makes me want more. Wouldn’t it be wonderful if we could visit an oracle and see our future. Or maybe we’re better off not knowing. Peace and Blessings

    • I know what you mean, EG. Most of the things that have taken place in my history I would not have wanted to know about beforehand…. :)

  6. The longing for family is a noble longing. Good way to show it. :)

    • :) Thanks, Pegg. My one concern is that I am not quite up to the task of portraying the poignant ache Zain has for redemption and a different future than what he has currently envisioned for himself….

  7. Beautiful story. Thank you for sharing.

  8. Great post, Nona. You have us savoring your story and asking for more – always a good thing in an excerpt. :)

  9. Thanks for sharing your novel with us – for something to savor!

  10. Thanks for sharing this Nona.
    “I know no such woman as would have me.” I can relate to that. That’s pretty much how I felt before I found my wife.

    I am noticing, from reading this, and last month’s piece, that you use some very interesting verbs in your writing. It seems to give you a unique voice. Well done.

    • Thank you, Adam. :) Your comment is appreciated, very much. It has been an interesting adventure to find my voice. :)

  11. I enjoyed this excerpt, Nona. So glad you’ve begun sharing them as part of the CW Blog Chain. What a wonderful way to give us a glimpse into your stories, your characters, your voice and vision. Already looking forward to next month’s excerpt! :)

    • Thanks, Cindee. :) This was going to be released in August, but I decided there was still too much to do in preparation for the expanded version. The ‘abridged’ version is currently available on Smashwords for 99 cents.

  12. This was a great post. Can’t wait to see what excerpt you will have planned for next month.

  13. Deborah K. Anderson

    Great excerpt, Nona. Seems as though Zain was doing some savoring. :wink:

    • Anonymous

      I love the theme that God can use our past horrors and tragedies to give us a bright future. I’m late to your post because I only just discovered last night that our wireless router apparently is the reason I couldn’t get to your site. Problem solved (I hope). Great post, Nona.

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